Monday, April 4, 2011

Aftermath… (High Octain)

From massive quake, tsunami broke--
a shift in the tectonic plate
that caused the Earth to vacillate.

Like sleeping dragon that awoke,
and in his haste, the coast erased
and wiped-out all the local folk

we watched the sea obliterate;
from massive quake, tsunami broke.

From massive quake, tsunami broke…
survivors cling to news and wait,
as mud and oil coagulate.

And like some cruel and heartless joke--
more are displaced by nuclear waste
mixed with debris and rising smoke.

Again we listen for their fate:
“From massive quake, tsunami broke…”
©Copyright Ginny Brannan April 2011

High Octain is simply a double Octain, but as one poem – the refrains are the same (though varying them to some degree is perfectly acceptable), a- and b- rhymes are the same, and the c/c line with the internal rhyme can optionally be rhymed in the second instance (as here). There is no restriction on the level of repetition, but in most cases the stipulated refrain A is enough; this may even feel too repetitive and need varying somewhat particularly in the High Octain, where it appears four times. *Octain format created by Luke Prater.


  1. the rhyme flowed seamlessly....good use of words here too..vacillate...coagulate...cheers pete

  2. Loved the use of the Octain format. Good poem that flows well and uses the correct words well.

  3. very nice form...a harrowing tale told well...

  4. Yes really like this one, Ginny. High Octain used very well... love your blog; looking great! Seriously, very attractively presented.

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  5. This theme inspired me too. Great expressed poem.

  6. Don't know if I commented on this one yet, but glad to see it here. Nice flow to this. I have yet to try this format for a poem (sorry, Luke)

  7. Extremely well done and very thoughtful. I liked it.

  8. very nice poetry progression...superb...

  9. masterfully done.
    Thanks for linking.


  10. I know someone already mentioned this but the rhyming was incredible and the over all flow seamless. As for the content it was powerful, gripping, and heart-rending


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