Written for d'Verse Poets Pub Meeting the Bar "Imagism" 1/19/2012
Swift silent glide through backyard
to light on lavender buddleia.
Pale lemon trimmed in ebony
touched with sapphire, her
wings pulse softly, finding
balance against breeze;
extends proboscis straw, sips delicately,
finding succor in sweet nectar.
Common yellow swallowtail
graces with her beauty.
© Ginny Brannan January 2012
Very beautiful words, Ginny! Great images projected here!
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Thanks Charles!
Deletebalance against breeze...LOVE that line! This is a perfect example of Imagism from my understanding. The language couldn't be more "thingy" but your chosen words sing poetically! And so happy you made it too! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Tash! So glad you reminded me!
DeleteBeautiful. Soft, gentle, just like the beautiful picture.
ReplyDeletepretty sure you nailed this...it is a beautiful capture of that butterfly...little sky dancer...really a lovely piece...
Delete@Daydreamertoo, thank you.
Delete@Brian, Thanks, appreciate your thoughts."Little sky dancer"... like that, wish I'd thought of it!!
Lovely...your words float like the fluttering of the butterfly
ReplyDeleteThanks Susie. I know how much you like butterflies!
ReplyDeletea lady indeed, such tender elegance..as in your words...love how you captured her and now i can't wait to see them fly again..
ReplyDeleteThanks Claudia!
Delete"finding balance against breeze" is such a lovely way of describing this. K.
ReplyDeleteI love the gracefulness of a butterfly in flight, such a thing of gentle beauty. You've touched on its delicateness in the middle stanza, yet it seems to covey strength as well. Enjoyed reading this. :)
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Thank you!
Deletenicely written Ginny...are you assuming this butterfly is a female or did you check? Remember I did take courses in Butterfly Biology.
ReplyDeleteI am assuming, and how can you tell? Actually had thought that if butterflies are like other species, than the male may have the brighter colors. Let me know if I have to change my adjectives!!
DeleteSo far the images that I have either written or seen have been simple. This has a bit of an intellectual flavor and is stunning. Love this line: "extends proboscis straw, sips ladylike,"
ReplyDeleteThank you. Actually had to look the term up for how the butterfly feeds. It basically rolls its tongue into a straw that is called a proboscis--and all this time I thought a proboscis referred to a 'nose!'
DeleteAbsolutely beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mama Zen!
DeleteGorgeous and lighter than air feel to this. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Buddah!
ReplyDeleteI love this...you feel the grace and beauty of the butterfly through your words...Oh and I so love butterflies. :)
ReplyDeleteJust like it's subject, so pretty, so delicate, so intense, "...finding/balance against breeze" absolutely lovely!
ReplyDeletereally beautiful Ginny - had such a tranquility about it - the slow suck of the probosis filling of nectar - sublime - Lib
ReplyDeleteGinny...love it as much now as I did my first visit :) Thank you for finding the time to share this with NWCU...a perfect response to the prompt! Hope you enjoy a wonderful weekend ahead :)
ReplyDeleteGlad you reposted this piece. Fits in perfectly for the wake up call this week. Excellent write, beautifully composed. Thanks
ReplyDeleteAh, the Zebra Swallowtale! What a magical creature, and what wonderfully descriptive lines!
ReplyDelete"Pale lemon trimmed in ebony
touched with sapphire..."
Images for the mind!
Roger ☺
I love and admire you who see the gentle side'o things. I've never been able to in my dark corner lol you've captured the exact beauty in the image with your words . .something I've want to but usually can't. nice supple write :)
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