The fog slips heavy through the hills
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| Image: Moevs, Marina River |
Peaceable river gently flows,
mirror meandering through the woods
Reminds me of you, once more.
Like river, we skirt certain issues
that nobody else seems to see;
disguised like the fog, in thick camouflage,
burying feelings, burying thoughts
as current turns past, silently
© Ginny Brannan January 2012
Photo courtesy of Tess Kincaid, TheMag--she provides image, we provide story! Sharing at The Mag #98
Sharing at d'Verse Poets Pub Open Link Night #29 1/31/12!
slips, creeps, flows, meandering, skirts, turns
ReplyDeleteThis really has a lovely flow - and with all that movement you end it with "silently." Beautiful.
nice...really like your descriptors in this....and i think that many find this the easy path...until of course the waterfall when all crashes on the rocks below....nice capture...
ReplyDeletenice...look forward to seeing you at OLN...
DeleteLovely flow to your poem. Seems to apply to many relationships.
ReplyDeleteThoughtful, very well expressed...
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have expressed human feelings in the flow of the river and the creeping fog.
ReplyDeletewonderful Ginny...especially that second verse...just beautiful.
ReplyDeleteNice one Ginny. This line really touches me, 'Like river, we skirt certain issues'
ReplyDeleteriver of life…metaphorically portrayed.
ReplyDeletenice rhyme here, to this very thoughtful piece.
Nice.
thank you.
I understand the message in this very well Ginny....beautiful writing!!
ReplyDeleteNice! Love how you related the river to what goes on inside of us!
ReplyDeleteah..it works for a while...but then...finally it will find its way to the surface... great image for these undercurrents ginny..
ReplyDeleteGinny,
ReplyDeleteThis has a very nice lyric flow... a melancholic sense at the end without over-sentimentality or melodrama. This is a fine job of writing.
Current turns past- very nice play on words- but actually a really meaningful piece about how on the surface the river (life) can look beautiful and serene in its surroundings, but that actually the river always runs deep. I guess what counts is if your strong enough to swim against the current
ReplyDeleteVery interesting use of nature. Works really well.
ReplyDeleteGreat work.
Like the switch halfway through from the natural to the intimate. The last line was well crafted.
ReplyDeletethere are undercurrents in the river...and even if it flows out, sometimes it flows right back ~
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hey ginny - the kind of poem and picture i want to hide out in - just for a while, to feel the fresh nature of it all :)
ReplyDeleteNature piece .... metaphor for relationship's turns. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis composition engenders private reflection, the not-so-still waters of your river running deep.
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