Under broken umbrella I huddle,
poor shelter from this bitter storm…
Acid words rain
scouring raw emotions,
eroding, undermining
until all that remains
are underpinnings
and floating debris
of the once
solid pier
that was
‘us’
Sadness and anger
hammer barrier walls
hammer barrier walls
Berms of resolve dissolve,
grain
by
grain.
by
grain.
Pain floods in;
salt stings my face
as nothing remains
intact in the wake
of our
intact in the wake
of our
personal
hurricane.
© Ginny Brannan August 2011
Image: Flickr, Umbrella left behind by Tyler J. Clemens VIII |
Wow! Powerful! "floating debris of the once solid pier that was us" Both of my girls are going through divorce now. Your words speak the pain they are going through.
ReplyDeleteWow very intense piece, when the umbrella breaks it seems to break good and lets everything come crashing down.
ReplyDeletewhew...i have stood in these storms...when there seems no safe ground...and like a hurricane you find there are moments and you are only in the eye...a powerful evocative piece..
ReplyDeleteYou picked great imagery to portray the inner message. It's an emotional piece that avoids being trite. The ancient story made new again. An enjoyable read.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful read. As I am going through this hurricane myself, I can say that if it wasn't for poetry, I wouldn't have been able to withstand the violent winds and storm surges. Thanks for the power of your words.
ReplyDeleteYes, it is always the hurricane within that brings the deepest damage.
ReplyDeleteAwesome choices of words in this. I like berm. Always liked that word!
smart words...
ReplyDeletelovely magpie.
very intense and I am happy you shared this
ReplyDeleteA well written account of unhappiness in free verse form. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteClever. Topical. And rounded off with a brilliant image.
ReplyDeleteThe 'erosion' is in the words and the form.
ReplyDeleteThe hurt is everywhere. Your piece put it there.
So much feeling so poignantly expressed, so well done.
Cheers
(I wish you happier times.)
Great stuff brilliantly done.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
"Personal hurricane" is such a powerful notion.
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