always
cries before
returning here;
intuitively
feeling jagged sadness,
instinctively reeling, as
closeted pain, unbidden, now
escapes--anguish for the child long gone;
she always cries before returning here.
© Ginny Brannan July 2011
This poetic form is called the Acrostic Dectina, and is a variation the Dectina Refrain, created by Marion Friedenthal. The acrostic portion was added by Philip of Poet Freak. It is a 10-letter word with same first and last letters, which makes up the 10 lines of the poem. The syllable count is 1/2/3/4/5/6/7/8/9/ and 10, 10 being the first 10 syllables (or 4 lines) of the acrostic.
Shared at d'Verse Poet's Pub Open Link Night #4 8/09/11
Shared at d'Verse Poet's Pub Open Link Night #4 8/09/11
Love this and the poetry form.
ReplyDeletemmm...working with children that have been abused, i sometimes have to go into those closets with them...tight with emo....
ReplyDeleteSo sad...and lovely.
ReplyDeleteGreat execution on the form, and plenty of feeling and expression.
ReplyDeleteWell done. My children feel that way about my house since we lost their dad. The pain of my house is almost more than they can bear. It has created a deep sorrow for me, but I won't relinquish it as my memories are happy ones.
ReplyDeleteSuch an awful feeling, but wonderfully written.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely form.. haunting message as well ~
ReplyDeleteWonderfully compact and direct. Says a great deal in so few words.
ReplyDeleteGinny, this turned out great! Really powerful...as Brian said, tight with emotion.
ReplyDeleteThis is great Ginny! Such an interesting form and you really did a great job, very emotive.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I was not familiar with this form. Will have to try it!
ReplyDeleteWonderful use of the form, carried true depth in this piece. Great write ~ Rose
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