Sunday, September 21, 2014

Loosing the Floodgates


















Both blinded by the rage within—
my words, a knife to penetrate
to slash; to watch exsanguinate.

You tore away the underpin
your words cajole —I lose control;
no holding back…no discipline.

You volley to eviscerate—
both blinded by the rage within.

© Ginny Brannan 2014

Written for Magpie Tales #238. Image provided by Tess Kincaid
She provides the image, we the story!

Sharing at d'Verse Poets Meeting the Bar: Octain Refrain 3/25/16

25 comments:

  1. Love the journey this poem took me on. Your use of strong "e" words made me smile.... even the collage of "exsanguinate" - a word I had never seen in use before - mesmerized my mind. Thank you!

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  2. i felt the rage in this...stunning!!

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  3. You have exsanguinated the words; remarkable...

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  4. That rage can be felt - great match with pic

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  5. walking off some anger to get a clearer view..

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  6. This one was nice and powerful. Clever rhyme.

    I confess that I had to look up exsanguinate.

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  7. The rhyme adds a softness to the pain...

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  8. and blinded we cut each other to the quick...
    and the cycle continues...

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  9. exsanguinate

    such a powerful coinage that alludes to bloodshed yet doesnt make it seem as gory. Pretty powerful.

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  10. Admire the form and the way words come alive with knife,slash, tore, volley ~

    Good to see you Ginny ~ Hope you are well ~

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  11. Wow! This is absolutely riveting...!

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  12. This is so evocative and true to the form. You have me feeling the underlying rage. So good to see you, Ginny.

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  13. Your choice of words inspires. Well written.

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  14. Heartfelt emotions...nicely done!

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  15. Sometimes loosing the floodgates is the thing that can finally bring the emotions under control again. When both are raging it can be scary...

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  16. the anger is palpable - words can be the cruelest weapons

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  17. You absolutely crushed this prompt! And I'm not just saying that because I had to go google "exsanguinate" (BTW: I LOVE new words and can't wait to play with that one, so thank you!)

    It flowed extremely well and the journey was tense and poignant. Really enjoyed this.

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  18. Whew. Powerful words here, and a nice prompt mashup.

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  19. Strong writing....you have captured the interaction between the two.

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  20. You put us inside the action - the point of view exact and the use of form - PERFECT!

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  21. Some very intense verbs.."exsanguiante" and "eviscorate" made this more than just an average quarrel. The use of the form was precise but read so smoothly.

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  22. Wow! Rage can be exactly that! Mish was bang on about your powerful been choice too.

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  23. Emotions oF sadness..
    joy.. fear.. doubt.. rage
    412 labeled ones
    are said to
    exist.. more
    than that iN Nuanced
    way.. but to guide them
    as dance in bio-feedback
    way.. is to regulate them and
    integrate senses to be fully
    free iN
    WiLL
    that counts
    less feels more..:)

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