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Both blinded by the rage within—
my words, a knife
to penetrate
to slash; to watch exsanguinate.
You tore away the underpin
your words cajole —I lose control;
no holding back…no
discipline.
You volley to eviscerate—
both blinded by the rage within.
© Ginny Brannan 2014
Written for Magpie Tales #238. Image provided by Tess Kincaid
She provides the image, we the story!
Sharing at d'Verse Poets Meeting the Bar: Octain Refrain 3/25/16
Love the journey this poem took me on. Your use of strong "e" words made me smile.... even the collage of "exsanguinate" - a word I had never seen in use before - mesmerized my mind. Thank you!
ReplyDeletei felt the rage in this...stunning!!
ReplyDeleteYou have exsanguinated the words; remarkable...
ReplyDeleteThat rage can be felt - great match with pic
ReplyDeletewalking off some anger to get a clearer view..
ReplyDeleteThis one was nice and powerful. Clever rhyme.
ReplyDeleteI confess that I had to look up exsanguinate.
The rhyme adds a softness to the pain...
ReplyDeleteand blinded we cut each other to the quick...
ReplyDeleteand the cycle continues...
fabulous composition
ReplyDeleteWheel of Life
The images and rhyme are excellent!
ReplyDeleteexsanguinate
ReplyDeletesuch a powerful coinage that alludes to bloodshed yet doesnt make it seem as gory. Pretty powerful.
Admire the form and the way words come alive with knife,slash, tore, volley ~
ReplyDeleteGood to see you Ginny ~ Hope you are well ~
Wow! This is absolutely riveting...!
ReplyDeleteThis is so evocative and true to the form. You have me feeling the underlying rage. So good to see you, Ginny.
ReplyDeleteYour choice of words inspires. Well written.
ReplyDeleteHeartfelt emotions...nicely done!
ReplyDeleteSometimes loosing the floodgates is the thing that can finally bring the emotions under control again. When both are raging it can be scary...
ReplyDeletethe anger is palpable - words can be the cruelest weapons
ReplyDeleteYou absolutely crushed this prompt! And I'm not just saying that because I had to go google "exsanguinate" (BTW: I LOVE new words and can't wait to play with that one, so thank you!)
ReplyDeleteIt flowed extremely well and the journey was tense and poignant. Really enjoyed this.
Whew. Powerful words here, and a nice prompt mashup.
ReplyDeleteStrong writing....you have captured the interaction between the two.
ReplyDeleteYou put us inside the action - the point of view exact and the use of form - PERFECT!
ReplyDeleteSome very intense verbs.."exsanguiante" and "eviscorate" made this more than just an average quarrel. The use of the form was precise but read so smoothly.
ReplyDeleteWow! Rage can be exactly that! Mish was bang on about your powerful been choice too.
ReplyDeleteEmotions oF sadness..
ReplyDeletejoy.. fear.. doubt.. rage
412 labeled ones
are said to
exist.. more
than that iN Nuanced
way.. but to guide them
as dance in bio-feedback
way.. is to regulate them and
integrate senses to be fully
free iN
WiLL
that counts
less feels more..:)