As night wanes into predawn light,
I dream-slip holes through time and space
where past and present interlace,
and for a moment we retrace
the fervent fire…the sweet desire;
we coalesce in youth's embrace—
till morning rays again erase...
as night wanes into predawn light.
© Ginny Brannan 2013
Shared at d'Verse Poets Pub Open Link Night #102
nice...love the dreamy feel of this...the dream-slipping holes through time and space...love the times when night/day and dream and reality wash into each other and overlap a bit..
ReplyDeletethere is a nice rhythm in this...the form or scheme adds to that...i like the revisiting youths desire...night allows us a bit of darkness to do that in...smiles...and hopefully the light does not take it all away...smiles.
ReplyDeletetagging you in...
DeleteI just love the form, subject and content! Ginny this one is "stellar"! Sorry for the bad pun, but it really is beautifully done. :)
ReplyDeleteHey Mary, your "bad puns" are always welcome!!
DeleteGinny, I love it! Just the right touch of sweetness and romance, sentimental and heartfelt! Wonderful!
DeleteThis was wistful and had a feel of sad longing, as though you didn't want the dream to end. Great writing - the perfect length.
ReplyDeleteGinny, I love the octain and what you have accomplished with it in this dream-like poem. You are so good at form poetry. Maybe I need to write another octain. I'm stuck right now.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! I love the form.
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely Ginny! Makes me long for those times--
ReplyDeleteVery nice!
ReplyDeleteWell thought out and executed.>KB
ReplyDeleteBeautifully penned, Ginny. I love this.
ReplyDeleteOh, so nice to read a new octain! Or is it? Maybe a variation on the normal rhyme scheme? Either way,it parcels up the message very snugly.
ReplyDeleteLove 'dream-slip'
"and for a moment we retrace
ReplyDeletethe fervent fire"
fervent, yes. well done!
coalesce in youth's embrace...those are the good nights. sometimes you damn the morning..
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteParticularly love the first verse.
Beautiful, simple, clear - love it!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThis one holds the magic of the dreamworld. Filled with mysticism from another realm. Glad I stopped by as I really enjoyed this poem.
ReplyDeleteI like your ink, Ginny...beautiful, romantic and great imagry.~jackie~
ReplyDeleteGinny,
ReplyDeleteYou always seem to be able to capture elusive (and allusive) thoughts and ideas in your fine short pieces. I always enjoy stopping. Nice work here.
This is beautiful, Ginny; just so rich and playful and ...
ReplyDeletesorry, I'm gushing now.
I love the 'dream-slip holes through time an space' ... one of my favourite things to do. This speaks so eloquently of romance and beauty.
ReplyDeletehey ginny
ReplyDeleteI can SO relate to this one ginny. and you use one of my favourite words 'interlace' and I love the drop down rhyme into 'retrace'. such a S W eeet idea, time tunnels taking us places we can remember and perhaps to spaces we have already forgotten. a real sense of peace in the ability to travel Who-style ;)
Ahh.. yes pre-dawn light is a "mixing" time of present and past. The flow adds to the dreamy feel of this! Hope you are enjoying your summer - I'm having trouble keeping up with things, but that is the way of my summers usually. :)
ReplyDeleteLove the structure and rhyme in this.
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