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| Image: Indestructible by Man Ray (Wikipedia) |
Loud the metronome is clicking like some ancient clock now
ticking
beating like a lover might upon his long lost true love’s
door.
Waiting answer not forthcoming, steadily now hear the
drumming,
in his head a soft voice humming…a humming like not heard
before--
“Just a neighbor,” he was thinking—the voice that he’d not
heard before,
only
that and nothing more
So he tarries in the shadow, nighttime passing to the morrow
seems his love had disappeared, deep anger prompts him to
deplore--
Fast it seems, their days were fleeting; wronged and rueful heart retreating,
chill to chase someone who’s cheating; cheating back won’t
even score;
burned and bruised, emotions bleeding--now he finally knows the score--
infatuation,
nothing more.
© Ginny Brannan
December 2012
(*chill: adj. discouraging, dispiriting)
Had a bit of fun with this, "Poe" etically speaking!! Written for The Mag #146.
Sharing at d'Verse Poets Pub Open Link Night #73
Sharing at d'Verse Poets Pub Open Link Night #73
I took a Poe spin as well. Seemed natural to me.
ReplyDeletelol ohh, I love it,ginny! any raven fan would recognize it at once, and you nailed it, poetess :)
ReplyDeleteMonty
oh wow...really well spun ginny...it is haunting...and i def get your poe connection...
ReplyDeleteI am so impressed! I should go erase my feeble effort.
ReplyDeleteindeed impressed....thanks for sharing this
ReplyDeleteRemarkable - that's the word that springs to mind...
ReplyDeleteOh the pain we sometimes out our hearts through until one day, hopefully we get it and then, get over it.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece Ginny.
Fast it seems, their days were fleeting; wronged and rueful heart retreating,
ReplyDeletechill to chase someone who’s cheating; cheating back won’t even score.
Absolutely loved your rhythmical rendition for this Mag, especially these two lines which are a delight to read aloud.:)
Loved this! Quite rhythmic, hypnotic.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful...love the nod to Poe...
ReplyDeleteYou are a true word crafter Ginny!....Poe would be proud. :-)
ReplyDeleteRavens Beware when Ginny's about! Lovely!
ReplyDeleteOuch...seems there will be cheating, evermore. Good one Ginny.
ReplyDeleteThe language is exceptional. The story is sad. The emotion is alive. Really good poem.
ReplyDeleteSad that this was just a passing fancy ~ Good flow here Ginny ~
ReplyDeleteAs said above
ReplyDeleteThe flow I love
and the reference too
To Poe on cue
Wonderfully spun
Even if more of a sad run
Great rhythm... A sad tale you played well throughout the form. Haunting, really.
ReplyDeleteWow. That's amazing. Beautiful rhythm and flow. <3
ReplyDeleteDefinitely channeling EAPoe! And how well you did it - and said a good deal more here than that vaguely scary Raven's nevermore. Ha. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully done, Ginny...haunting & evocative. Love it! :)
ReplyDeleteI believe that Edgar himself is nodding from his grave. Wonderful work.
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