The molten dagger finds its mark,
myopic focus, bone on bone--
affliction's cryptic cause unknown
Corroded wires, electric arc
ignoring skin, strikes nerve within
as searing flash impales the dark.
Confront this demon all alone,
as molten dagger finds its mark.
Copyright Ginny Brannan May 2012
Shared at d'Verse Poet's Pub Open Link Night Week 46 5/29/12
This could be about being treated for skin cancer, I suppose -- "fierce penance dealt for sins unknown" (or for sins long forgotten)!
ReplyDeleteI like the form as well!
is is a bit scary you know...when one does not know their sins yet penance is taken...i like the energy of the electricity through the middle ginny...and it plays well off the pain that this engenders in your words...just thinking of the bone on bone scrape is enough for me...to cringe...
ReplyDeleteBrian, you hit the nail right on the head! Purposely left this vague. It is about pain, inspired in no small way by a sore knee I've dealt with for past several weeks. It's finally improving. Some moments were almost all-consuming. Tried to describe the feeling without actually using that "four letter" word!
DeleteAs searing flash pierces the dark.....nice line...very deep thoughts here...drew me in...nicely done
ReplyDeleteThis is very dramatic and 'piercing' Ginny. This can be interpreted in a number of way...but each of those would make me stop and give pause. You've become an expert at fitting big ideas into the rules of the form. Another very nice job.
ReplyDeleteGreat! Very dramatic and intriguing!
ReplyDeletealways great to see an octain every once and a while in blogworld..intriguing form for an intriguing topic ginny..
ReplyDeleteI love the octain and you've done it justice. This kind of felt like my back has been lately...very graphic experience.
ReplyDeleteSorry about your pain... Hope you feel better soon. This resonates with me since I m in a lot of pain right now.
ReplyDeleteSuperb write Ginny and do hope the day is repairing itself.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Oops - don't know where my mind was when I wrote day...
ReplyDeleteDo hope the knee is repairing itself!
Anna :o]
SO sorry it took me so long to get here! Ginny- love this one- could be interpreted in so many ways- pain? the electical synapses sending the messages? it actually just made be think about what it might feel like to get stabbed (sorry if that sounds morbid)- and the balde on bone- the seaing pain of it-this sounds SUPER strange- but this poem gave me the same sensation as when you bite cotton wool- you made me physically feel with this on Ginny- excellent
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