Tuesday, June 25, 2013

Wormholes



As night wanes into predawn light,
I dream-slip holes through time and space
where past and present interlace,

and for a moment we retrace
the fervent fire…the sweet desire;
we coalesce in youth's embrace—

till morning rays again erase...
as night wanes into predawn light.

© Ginny Brannan 2013

Shared at d'Verse Poets Pub Open Link Night #102

26 comments:

  1. nice...love the dreamy feel of this...the dream-slipping holes through time and space...love the times when night/day and dream and reality wash into each other and overlap a bit..

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  2. there is a nice rhythm in this...the form or scheme adds to that...i like the revisiting youths desire...night allows us a bit of darkness to do that in...smiles...and hopefully the light does not take it all away...smiles.

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  3. I just love the form, subject and content! Ginny this one is "stellar"! Sorry for the bad pun, but it really is beautifully done. :)

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    1. Hey Mary, your "bad puns" are always welcome!!

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    2. Ginny, I love it! Just the right touch of sweetness and romance, sentimental and heartfelt! Wonderful!

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  4. This was wistful and had a feel of sad longing, as though you didn't want the dream to end. Great writing - the perfect length.

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  5. Ginny, I love the octain and what you have accomplished with it in this dream-like poem. You are so good at form poetry. Maybe I need to write another octain. I'm stuck right now.

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  6. This is lovely Ginny! Makes me long for those times--

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  7. Well thought out and executed.>KB

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  8. Beautifully penned, Ginny. I love this.

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  9. Oh, so nice to read a new octain! Or is it? Maybe a variation on the normal rhyme scheme? Either way,it parcels up the message very snugly.

    Love 'dream-slip'

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  10. "and for a moment we retrace
    the fervent fire"

    fervent, yes. well done!

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  11. coalesce in youth's embrace...those are the good nights. sometimes you damn the morning..

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  12. Beautiful writing.

    Particularly love the first verse.

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  13. Beautiful, simple, clear - love it!!!!!!!

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  14. This one holds the magic of the dreamworld. Filled with mysticism from another realm. Glad I stopped by as I really enjoyed this poem.

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  15. I like your ink, Ginny...beautiful, romantic and great imagry.~jackie~

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  16. Ginny,

    You always seem to be able to capture elusive (and allusive) thoughts and ideas in your fine short pieces. I always enjoy stopping. Nice work here.

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  17. This is beautiful, Ginny; just so rich and playful and ...

    sorry, I'm gushing now.

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  18. I love the 'dream-slip holes through time an space' ... one of my favourite things to do. This speaks so eloquently of romance and beauty.

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  19. hey ginny

    I can SO relate to this one ginny. and you use one of my favourite words 'interlace' and I love the drop down rhyme into 'retrace'. such a S W eeet idea, time tunnels taking us places we can remember and perhaps to spaces we have already forgotten. a real sense of peace in the ability to travel Who-style ;)

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  20. Ahh.. yes pre-dawn light is a "mixing" time of present and past. The flow adds to the dreamy feel of this! Hope you are enjoying your summer - I'm having trouble keeping up with things, but that is the way of my summers usually. :)

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  21. Love the structure and rhyme in this.

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